Re-draft Scarlett investigation

Officer Makay log: Scarlett investigation.

7:23am-We entered the house, everything seems normal, apart from a broken vase, and upturned pillows. Every time an officer comes into this house it is immaculate.

7:57am- after looking around the whole house we decide to look at the security cameras of the shop opposite the house.

8:06am- we saw a group of teens- young adults come out a shabby van into the parking lot outside the shop, they walk up to the house then open the door and went in, we’ll have to look at different cameras

8:27am- we found a camera from a block of flats behind the house, from there we could see through a back window, which we saw the gang lock the grandmother into, then later Scarlett joined

8:34am- we went back to the house to find the door open, we looked in the room where the two were. They were gone, there was blood on the floor, and we are investigating now.

9:23am- the DNA was a match, the pair have the same DNA as the mother, we fear we might be too late. We are checking cameras around the whole town to find them.

9:46am- we have checked most of the cameras, we have tracked down the van, we believe this is their hide out. We are calmly going to ask them come out, if they don’t then we will be forced to use go in our own way.

9:55am- no answer and the door is locked, we will have to break down the door.

9:57am- there gone, they left the remains of the two, it looks like there are bite marks in the flesh, we will investigate farther, first we have to tell the mother the bad news. Then we will find them.

A bit of a misunderstanding - you are supposed to retain the plot of Little Red Riding Hood, but the story line should not include any actual wolf - so this doesn't make great sense.

You can respond to this marking by answering the target question as a comment below (you do not need to repose the whole thing this time!)

KPI: C2c Write scripts to improve dialogue with a clear purpose A

+ You show understanding of the character speaking in the choice of language (the language used in a police report)

T What do you want the audience to feel? How could you make them feel this more?

L Explain the difference between "there" and "they're"

What I meant for it to mean was that the gang are cannibals, that's why they are a danger, but next time I will stay within the plot.

They’re means they are. There means like someone saying: look over there.

Little Scarlett

Officer Makay log: Scarlett investigation.

7:23am-We entered the house, everything seems normal, apart from a broken vase, and upturned pillows. Every time an officer comes into this house it is immaculate.

7:57am- after looking around the whole house we decide to look at the security cameras of the shop opposite the house.

8:06am- we saw a group of teens- young adults come out a shabby van into the parking lot outside the shop, they walk up to the house then open the door and went in, we’ll have to look at different cameras

8:27am- we found a camera from a block of flats behind the house, from there we could see through a back window, which we saw the gang lock the grandmother into, then later Scarlett joined

8:34am- we went back to the house to find the door open, we looked in the room where the two were. They were gone, there was blood on the floor, and we are investigating now.

9:23am- the DNA was a match, the pair have the same DNA as the mother, we fear we might be too late. We are checking cameras around the whole town to find them.

9:46am- we have checked most of the cameras, we have tracked down the van, we believe this is their hide out. We are calmly going to ask them come out, if they don’t then we will be forced to use go in our own way.

9:55am- no answer and the door is locked, we will have to break down the door.

9:57am- there gone, they left the remains of the two, it looks like there are bite marks in the flesh, we will investigate farther, first we have to tell the mother the bad news. Then we will find them.

Title: Little Scarlett 1 “As an actor”

Word Count: 200 words (minimum)

As an actor how would you perform the role of Little Scarlet OR Little Scarlet's mother to an audience, in the scene where Little Scarlet's mother sends her out across the estate to her Grandmother’s house?

In your answer you should refer to:

•             Emotion (How your character felt)

•             Motivation (What your character wanted)

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•             Movement;

Give reasons for your answer

IF YOU ARE STRUGGLING YOU CAN USE THE SENTENCE STARTERS TO TRY TO REACH NATIONAL STANDARD.

YOU CAN WORK THROUGH THE LEARNING MAT FOR ADVICE ON GETTING ABOVE THE NATIONAL STANDARD.

I was playing little Scarlet Mother, and to make the audients feel sad for Little Scarlet I made my character stand up really tall and then added a lot of anger into her voice. 

 I would also try to back Little Scarlet into a corner, to add the effect of her being scared of me to the audience. Then I would try to “reason” with Little Scarlet and putting on a sweet mother’s voice and make the audience feel pity for me, then I would start raising my voice, louder and louder until I am almost screaming for her to get out. 

This should add the effect of how the audience thinks little Scarlet's mum is a bad mum because she is shouting and screaming at her child, most people thinks that's a bad thing to do to a child.

Title: Little Scarlett 2 “Creative Writing”

Title: Little Scarlett 2 “Creative Writing”

Word Count: 200 words (minimum)

Write a script of the police report at the end of your play. Explain what the police heard, found and did and what happened to both victims and criminals.

Think about using formal language or police jargon.

This script could be performed as a MONOLOGUE

Police officer 1: OK, miss, we understand what you are going through, but you just have to answer some of these questions before you go.

Mother: Fine! I just want this all to be over! I want to be left in peace!

Police officer 2: We understand, now, where did you send her?

Mother: To her grandmas, she’s sick and needed medicine, you know?

Police officer 2: and you sent her alone?

Police officer 1: What time was this?

Mother: Just be quiet! One at a time, yes I sent her alone, I couldn’t be with her, I was busy, k?

Police officer 1: and the time?

Mother: Oh, just around, you know… 9 or 10, I dunno. 

Police officer 2: Morning or night?

(Mother pauses and pretends thinks of what to say)

Mother: Night… But, she goes out alone at night a lot, you know, to go to the shops and that for me.

Police officer 1: have you or your daughter ever been involved in any street gangs, or shady people?

Mother: No! She’s just a kid! Jeese!

Police officer 1: And as for you?

Mother: No. And this is about my little angel-cake. Not me, aren’t you supposed to be police men or something?

Police officer 2: Yes, we just need to ask a few questions about her background before we set up a proper investigation.

Mother: What is there to know? She’s a little girl(she gestures her hand to show) about this tall, not very tall, skinny, red cap and brown hair. Is that what you need to know?

Police officer 1: That is very helpful, but also, what path did she take?

Mother: Oh, you know, through the under- pass. You know?

Police officer 2: yes we know that way, but can I ask, isn’t that the area where most of the gangs hang out?

Mother: Well yeah, but she knows not to talk to strangers, after what happened to her Da- any way what does it matter? Shouldn’t you be running the investigation by now, I am worried sick!(she pulled a sad face, as if she’s about to cry.)

Police officer 1: Yes that should be enough info, we will leave you be miss, and don’t worry, we have our best detectives on the case! She should be back in your arms very soon!

Assessment for create.

In this video I can see that everyone is listening to everyone else, and listening to their ideas But I think they can improve by including more detail by acting it out some specific parts a bit more.

Title: Lady Mary 1 “As an actor”

Word Count: 200 words (minimum)

As an actor how would you show your role as one of Lady Mary’s friends to an audience?

In your answer you should refer to:

• Who your character was;

• How your character felt;

• Voice;

• Movement;

Give reasons for your answer.

Hello, I am the little sister of Lady Mary, she recently got engaged to a man called ‘Mr Fox’; a man I or she knows much about him all she and I know is he lives in a big castle, goes to a pub every week, tall, handsome(as she says.) and very kind. But she said all of his wives before her had died strangely, we spoke to the priest about it- because he was a friend of Mr fox- and he said that he as least had over five wives! Strange.

    I felt very happy for her because she finally met someone! It has been years sense she has actually met a man, or anyone for that matter. It’s nice that she is finally getting out there.

    But I am also worried for her because she just met the man also she does not know him well and all his other wives had DIED! What if she is making the wrong choice, what if this man is not all what he says he is? But I can trust her, I trust she will get to know him before the wedding, if she does not like him she will call the wedding off… hopefully

All in all I am proud of her, finally getting some wind under her wings and getting out there and meeting people! Well she could have took some time to get to know him properly but it is her choice!

T Read the question carefully and think about how the answer should be written. This question was "as an actor" but you have written as the character. This should be reflective not creative writing!

My character was the little sister of Lady Mary, I think that she would be shocked because of all of the obvious reasons. One: her big sister has been alone for many years and did not go out much to make new friends or boyfriends. Two; she just met the man and is engaged to him. And three: she doesn’t know pretty much anything about him.

But I think she would be happy for her because Lady Mary has been alone for many years and would be happy for finally getting out there and having fun!

I think she would show that shock by putting on a higher voice a bit slower as of trying to find the right words. I think she would put a excited voice and hug her when she first finds out, and then do the shocked voice and pointing at her, trying to be the big sister out of the two.

Word Count: 200 words (minimum)  

How do you think the story Lady Mary and Mr. Fox should end? Write a story (out-of-role narration) continuing from the last line of mine …

"Then I dreamt that I ran downstairs and had just time to hide myself when you, Mr. Fox, came in dragging a young lady by the hair. And the sunlight glittered on her diamond ring as she clutched the tapestry where I lay hidden, and you drew your sword, and cut off the poor lady's hand."

Then Mr. Fox fixed Lady Mary in his stony gaze and his smile broadened just a little as he repeated, in whispering voice that could scarcely be heard: "But it is not so, dear heart, and it was not so, and God forbid it should be so!" Then Lady Mary stepped closer to him, and the smile left her face, and her voice rang as she cried:

"But it is so, and it was so,

Here's hand and ring I have to show."

And with that she pulled out the poor dead hand with the glittering ring from her skirts and pointed it straight at Mr. Fox. He laughed at her, a slow dry laugh, draped his arm around her shoulders, he could feel her tense up as he clutched her arm with his other arm as he whispered into her ear; “how dare you?”- His grip tightened- “you dare tell me that …” he started walking, horribly pulling at her until she thought her arm would be pulled off completely.

“I let you under my roof, I care for you, I do my best to please you, yet you don’t want that?”

His arm that was draped over her shoulder grabbed a hunk of her hair and pulled as she whimpered in pain onto the floor. He reached into his pocket and pulled out a long piece of worn down rope, it looked as if it was used many times before.

 He seized her by the closest piece of her, her leg, then pulled until it was impossible for her to get up, she was helpless, she cried out that she should have listened to her friends, that she should have never have gone into the bar, how he was evil… how she was wrong.

He laughed manically the whole time, he tied the rope around her waist and started to drag her into the dark corridor with the horrible room that lay beyond. Suddenly the doorbell rings, he cursed under his breath as the butler grunted as if he was lifting a heavy bolder than just an almost wasted away door.
 “What do you want?” he snarled as he saw the group of friends.

 Beyond the shadows Mr Fox was hastily gagging and tying lady Mary before she could cry out to her friends. 
“Stay here, we have friends to join you.” He said calmly while wiping away the dark hairs flopping down his face, as he strolled off lady Mary began to weep wishing she had listened to her friends beforehand, she heard gunshot then silence…                                 

As the group stood there with the older brother gripping the butler in his arms Mr Fox began to clap slowly and sarcastically the youngest of the family lowered the gun, cursing that she missed. Mr Fox walked towards the group, one slow step at a time.
 “I have to congratulate you, for coming so far!”- He paused putting his hand into his pocket and pointing at them, “I have to say: you are the ones that have come the farthest to killing me!” He pulled his hand out, it came with a silver gun. “Now, sadly, it’s time to say goodbye…” he pulled the safety off-

“Wait!” cried a voice from the darkness. Mr Fox turned to see a new group of people standing behind him, the maid and Lady Mary and two police officers both holding guns, pointed at him.

“Wait…”-he thought for a moment-“No, no, you can’t do this, I am protecting myself from armed robbers! Yeah! Look, they are holding my dear butler at gunpoint, what do you think I am going to do?”

“You have the right to remain silent, we know what you’re up too!” exclaimed the one on the left.

“We know about you and all of your wives!” said the one on the right, a little sheepishly for it was his first proper “mission” as he called it.

After a few minutes of fighting the cops managed to handcuff the man, then they discovered the room of horrors (the newbie was sick in a little bag once he first saw it), then finally the pair shoved Mr Fox into the car after he shouted to the group that he would find them and kill them. Lady Mary learnt to always know who the was going to date and/or marry, but she could not sleep well for the next few months.

L Try to be more consistent with tense. Are you writing in the past or the present? My starter was written in the past, so stick to that!

Lady Mary 1 "as an actor"

Title: Lady Mary 1 “As an actor”

Word Count: 200 words (minimum)

As an actor how would you show your role as one of Lady Mary’s friends to an audience?

In your answer you should refer to:

• Who your character was;

• How your character felt;

• Voice;

• Movement;

Give reasons for your answer.

Hello, I am the little sister of Lady Mary, she recently got engaged to a man called ‘Mr Fox’; a man I or she knows much about him all she and I know is he lives in a big castle, goes to a pub every week, tall, handsome(as she says.) and very kind. But she said all of his wives before her had died strangely, we spoke to the priest about it- because he was a friend of Mr fox- and he said that he as least had over five wives! Strange.

    I felt very happy for her because she finally met someone! It has been years sense she has actually met a man, or anyone for that matter. It’s nice that she is finally getting out there.

    But I am also worried for her because she just met the man also she does not know him well and all his other wives had DIED! What if she is making the wrong choice, what if this man is not all what he says he is? But I can trust her, I trust she will get to know him before the wedding, if she does not like him she will call the wedding off… hopefully 

All in all I am proud of her, finally getting some wind under her wings and getting out there and meeting people! Well she could have took some time to get to know him properly but it is her choice! 

Expectations In Drama.

Last session we played two cool games to help us understand the rules and expectations of the drama studio; one was called “Traffic Lights” and the other was “lifeboats”. Traffic lights toughed us to listen to simple instructions such as to stop, to sit, to remember where to sit and to pair up with any one, the way sir taught us this was by putting the rules into colours of traffic lights: RED- freeze; AMBER- sit down; GREEN- go. Then sir added more colours and rules to the game such as: BLACK-go to your seat that you were given; WHITE- shake hands with the nearest person. If you did not do these then you were out.  

The next game we played was called “lifeboats” the aim of the game was to make a group with the people that sir yelled out. E.G: ‘ Two girls and three boys’, ‘Everyone from your form’, ‘two boys two girls’ if you did not do these instructions correctly E.G: if sir said ‘ Get into groups of five girls and four boys.’ Then you get into groups of four girls and five boys you lose if you did it correctly and you were the first ones to sit down on the floor you win!